The Day You Have to Let Her Go (Original)

So, here's what I sound like when I'm exhausted and tried recording a song...because I have to XD

the song's entitled that way because I haven't thought of a good title yet.

this is a raw version...like it's super unedited you can even hear my voice cracked at some parts (and not to mention that I messed up and forgot my own lyrics while recording the track) ...and there's no reverb in it...I just grabbed my audacity and added the background music to it. I really need to record it (through my phone) because if I'll do it in the morning (because I thought of the melody and the finished the backtrack overnight)...I'll forget everything...so this serves as a memo and not the official version.

Now, I'm going to post this here to ask suggestions of what to change and what not to change...with the melody and lyrics...also, what do you think of the song? I'm open for criticisms

https://app.box.com/s/8dzmlawpfc4bjuzismmi

btw, here's the lyrics

I see you in the sky
you're gone but I'll always
have you in my heart

Tears, they fall, from my eyes
you left me without saying
goodbye, for the last time

I wanted to pretend, that this is not the end
you closed your eyes, I'll never see you again
Why does fate have to be like this to you and me
I'll close my eyes, and try to feel you next to me
but you're not here with me

So this is what you get for lovin'
the one you thought that God has given
you, but things like this, it really happens
someone has to go, you'll never know
the day you have to let her go.

Memories in my mind
you're gone and I
I have to leave the past behind.

I guess I have to face, this life in different ways
I miss your smile, your lips and your warm embrace
Why does fate have to be like this to you and me
we started happy, and ended up a tragedy
I wish you're here with me

So this is what you get for lovin'
the one you thought that God has given
you, but things like this, it really happens
someone has to go, you'll never know
the day you have to let her go.

Fairy tales and happy endings aren't real
to a broken-hearted man's reality
But every single thing in time will heal
When the right one comes unexpectedly

So this is what I get for lovin'
the one I thought that God has given
me, I never thought that she'd be leavin'
She has to go, and yes I know, tears will flow, 'cause She's the one
who has to go

this is the day I have to let her go

You have such a tremendous ability to write music, its amazing. This sounds like something I could hear off of an album. I liked your performance, too. I could definitely feel the emotion behind what you were singing.

I can't wait to hear the cleaned up version~ It'd be great if you could add in some background vocals or harmonies, too